Comment And Critics For friend's Story..~ = . ='

- sense the mysterious element in this paragraph.

-attract me to reads more to know how this story ends.

-The words and style of writing makes me easy to read. simple .

-Love how he wrote bout village peoples like "Yes, I'm agreed with you Abu, let the city boy do what he capable of...".. - look down on people -..

- this story can be impr0ve in order to make it more interesting and more sense of mystery~

- Should elaborate the idea of the story to make it more attractive

-In scale 1 - 10 , I give him 7~

Short Paragraph..~

Krinnggggggg..!!! The break time is on at Nikogaku High School. Class 2-D is always full of energy. All delinquents of 2nd year students were placed in that class but among them there is one guy who crazy enough to take the role of "Head of Monster Class". That is Endo Kenji, red-haired, tall and strong but never used any of this advantage for good purpose.Today he was going to confess his love to Haruko in front of crowd in the dining hall because he lose bet to his good friend who is also the member of class D, Akira. On his way to the dining hall,he walk pass the basketball court and he see how hard the captain of team training by himself. " pftt..What a crazy gorilla to play ball alone under the sun..hahaha!!" Kenji shouts but he is ignored by Shinjo. This two big shot at Nikogaku always been enemies since their set their foot on this school turf because for Kenji, Shinjo is the only man who can fight with him equally. As Kenji walk pass the court, he met Akira who is smiling at that time. " are u ready to confess to Haruko?" ask Akira. "Dont u have any other challenge for me, The Head Monster to do?hahahha It's an easy task" answer Kenji....And A few minutes after, Kenji turned into laughing object because he was turned down by Haruko aggressively and get laughed by other student in the dining hall....... He got himself a new nickname which is " Red-Haired Monkey" by Akira and for the result Akira was beaten by Kenji...........  and so other male students in the dining hall who laughed at him earlier..

Character..

Endo Kenji is the protagonist of Rookies- the beginning-. At the beginning, Kenji is a slacker, good for nothing other than fighting. Kenji was always trying to ask girls out, but was rejected constantly, the 50th rejection occurring at the start of the story. He then met Yagi Touko, a lovely basketball fan girl, whom he fell in love with immediately. This and Touko's encouragement led to him to join the Nikogaku basketball team. However, as a complete beginner, he was not able to keep up with the rest of the team at first despite his height, athleticism, stamina, speed and leaping ability. He regards himself as a genius though, with self-confidence that borders on arrogance. Kenji's most recognizable trait is his red hair, though he shaves his head as reparation for an error that led to a loss in the Interhigh Tournament against Megurugawa. He has a habit of making fun of other players by giving them various nicknames, such as calling Shinjo "gorilla". At first, Kenji was known for his poor basketball skills as a beginner and in his first official matches, fouled out every game. However, his basketball skills advanced by hard training. First he developed his basic skills, such as dribbling and layups. Then, trained by Shinjo, he became a formidable rebounder, with his rebounding becoming his claim to fame throughout the latter half of the series. His jump shooting was then developed by Coach Kawato, who had him make 20,000 shots in a week. However, he also injured his back during the match against Housen when saving the ball from going off the court, and underwent rehabilitation after Nikogaku's subsequent loss to Aiwa Academy. While considered by most to be an amateur's instinctual tactic, the tactic itself, coupled with Kenji's formidable athleticism actually goes well with his somewhat unorthodox playing style. This allows Kenji to be in the right place at the right time to intercept more experienced players. In spite of the setbacks he has had to face, Kenji displays a great deal of tenacity and determination that carry him through and help reciprocate for his other failings, both on and off the court. Although his love for Touko and rivalry with Shinichi are the main driving forces motivating him to succeed in basketball, his injury during the Housen match makes him realize that he has actually come to love the game, leading him to give his all for his team and bring them victory.